Train warning, dont let it happen to you

[skarlorn]

Originally Posted by kotton05 [You must be logged in to view images. Log in or Register.]

Jeez mm, so much knowledge in one post almost made my head explode.

[Phenyo]

Originally Posted by maskedmelonpai [You must be logged in to view images. Log in or Register.]

shoulda done liek this:



add some mockery alongside emphasis to you opener to hook you readers.



good job here, it get you readers thinking. i was liek, "yeah, why he do that??? :c"



also very solid. you establish youself as cool and normal. see suggestions for emphasizing your agreeable nature



remember, emphasis



you tryin to spare people from being victimized liek you were, come at them from below, make them feel sorry. let they anger bristle at the injustice!

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