I'll give you a tip... you can't use woke and bro and yo all in the same line, dude. You're not an Erudite Rapper, and it's too many rhymes. I highly doubt you ever say words like yo bro woke yokel yodel cudgel or even yogurt in real life, so it just came across as abrasive to read, rendering your use of Woke very Unlit
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