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#22
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Please, please, please post this in blue UN
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#23
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Oh look another thread of Nexii begging for attention. When did I take you off ignore...?
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#24
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#27
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Prose lacks depth; too much telling - not enough showing. Plot arc is tired, try a little anachronism here and there. Otherwise, the dialogue is believable.
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#29
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i came
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#30
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Needs more descriptions of phallic lizard objects but otherwise a decent read.
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